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A promise by ~Yaoi-aloha:iconYaoi-aloha:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Spoken Word


To promise

I believe you every time
but what you do to me
in a consistant line
feels so wrong
in every way
it makes me feel
like you like to play
using them may be okay
but what do i do when
you say

i promise

not to cry out in tears
but repeating it
increases my fears
that you dont care
one single bit
and that you want to split
inone more time

one promise

is all i can take
its the last straw
or else my heart will rip
so say it once
with one

last promise

will be our last
and our relationship
will become the past
cause i tried
and tried
to believe every time
but broken is what it became

stop the promise
©2007-2009 ~Yaoi-aloha
:iconyaoi-aloha:

Author's Comments

i know that i cant spell so dont check it. it was a thing that just came to me so if your woundering what it means give me a while then ask me.

Comments


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:iconyin17:
~yin17 Dec 31, 2007, 8:55:22 AM
so dose this have to do with what I think it dose?
it's good.
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I'll win you at Pong!
:iconyaoi-aloha:
~Yaoi-aloha Dec 31, 2007, 11:42:31 PM
what do you think it has to deal with....hehehe.
thanks

--
What fate has brought me, my love...is you.
:iconyin17:
~yin17 Jan 1, 2008, 12:12:26 PM
if it has to deal with what I think it has to deal with then me say you have had to deal with it for awhile and no your just saying something about it? hehehehe

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new year new life new begins..... so what else is new?
:iconchikatsu:
Mood: Sadness ~Chikatsu Jan 5, 2008, 4:59:36 AM
This is quite a sad poem

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No matter where you go, there you are :D

:D Smile, it confuses people :D
:iconyaoi-aloha:
~Yaoi-aloha Jan 5, 2008, 12:17:27 PM
can you plz explain from your point of view why it is sad?

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What fate has brought me, my love...is you
:iconchikatsu:
Mood: Sadness ~Chikatsu Jan 6, 2008, 2:59:47 AM
Well i don't know the details behind the poem. But it seems like someone is toying with someone elses feelings and keeps on promising something and breaking the promise? And keeps on promising after and the other person knows the promises the person is making have no credibility behind them, but wants to believe them nonetheless.

And the person keeps believing the other persons promises and always ends up disapointed and eventually can't take it anymore and they drift apart. And all that is quite sad :(

I don't know if my interpretation is accurate or whether i've gone off rambling about something that has nothing to do with what you were trying to say in this poem...still, it's a cool poem ^^

--
No matter where you go, there you are :D

:D Smile, it confuses people :D
:iconyaoi-aloha:
~Yaoi-aloha Jan 8, 2008, 1:26:58 AM
no, you have it in a nutshell. it's ture to. its happening in my life, well it was.

--
What fate has brought me, me love...is you.
:iconchikatsu:
~Chikatsu Jan 8, 2008, 5:16:21 AM
Well that's probably why i liked it so much and it sounded so intense; coz poems that come from the heart or are based on real-life tend to be the best ^^

--
No matter where you go, there you are :D

:D Smile, it confuses people :D
:iconyaoi-aloha:
~Yaoi-aloha Jan 9, 2008, 8:02:23 PM
i agree. And thank you for the watch.

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What fate has brought me, my love...is you.
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